Greetings, all. I'm an engineer by day, and scribble orchestral music on Musescore after dark. I've composed a 33 min orchestral tone poem for which I would love to get some feedback.
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"Hello David,
you had given me some very valuable feedback on a earlier orchestral work, particularly noting the absence of a cohesive theme. I have since decided to break the piece up into a full length symphony and in this context, I'd appreciate…"
you had given me some very valuable feedback on a earlier orchestral work, particularly noting the absence of a cohesive theme. I have since decided to break the piece up into a full length symphony and in this context, I'd appreciate…"
"Thanks, David. Definitely appreciate the feedback. The passage that starts at 4:15 does have a climax at 4:23 which does fizzle out, because I didn't want a sustained one after the introduction. I wanted to save that for later.
I thought I had some…"
I thought I had some…"
"Hello David,
you had given me some very valuable feedback on a earlier orchestral work, particularly noting the absence of a cohesive theme. I have since decided to break the piece up into a full length symphony and in this context, I'd appreciate…"
you had given me some very valuable feedback on a earlier orchestral work, particularly noting the absence of a cohesive theme. I have since decided to break the piece up into a full length symphony and in this context, I'd appreciate…"
In response to some very legitimate criticism of an earlier orchestral work of mine which lacked a central motif and introduced too many disjointed themes in a 33 minute overture, I decided to break the piece up and convert it into a symphony.Here…
"I like the contrast of the tranquility in the foreground with the tension that seems to be lurking in the background. Have you considered adding a string section accompaniment?"
One of the things that I enjoy doing is taking a brisk piece in 3/4, slowing down the tempo and creating a 4/4 version of it.I personally feel that this sometimes really brings out the notes of a beautiful melody as the one in the 3/4 minuet from…
"Thanks, David. I am restructurin the work to incorporate a variation of the melodic element into the rhythmic pattern which actually exists in <easure 23 (1:09') that I can modulate throughout the piece so that it's more recognisable.
While I do…"
While I do…"
"by the way when you wrote "although unfortunately the actual instrument sounds pretty bad", did you mean the musescore soundfont rendition of it, or the choice of the violas in that register?Thanks"
"Tahnsk again HS Tech
I do realise in retrospect that the serious flaw in the work is the lack of the rhythmic pattern to convey the ide of a unifying theme.
This is something that I may hopefully be able to address within the existing structure, to…"
I do realise in retrospect that the serious flaw in the work is the lack of the rhythmic pattern to convey the ide of a unifying theme.
This is something that I may hopefully be able to address within the existing structure, to…"
"Thanks a TON David. I absolutely appreciate your pointed and detailed criticism, which is precisely what I need. I was a bit apprehensive of the excssive use of tremolos myself, but went with it, because I felt that it created the nervous energy for…"
"Thanks again, David. The reason that I avoided a countermelody in the violas passage is that I didn't want anything to detract from the violas melodic line. However if there is a way to do that and minimise the impact of the punctuating chord…"
"Thank you, HS Tech for your very honest feedback. There is a lot of food for thought here.
In terms of a unifying theme, my intention was to use the Dat-dat-de-Dat-dat=dat rhythmic pattern as one. Clearly that didn't come through quite as clearly as…"
In terms of a unifying theme, my intention was to use the Dat-dat-de-Dat-dat=dat rhythmic pattern as one. Clearly that didn't come through quite as clearly as…"
"Thank you VERY much, David, and seeing as how you hold Bruckner in high esteem, you're an absolutely proper critic! You're also correct in that it does plod quite a bit, for which I will (tongue in cheek) blame Bruckner's influence! . I did try some…"
This is a 33 minute throwback-to-the-19th-Century composition for a full symphony orchestra with extra brass (2 trumpets, 2 horns, and 2 trombones) expected to play from the balcony - an idea that I stole from Respighi (who probably stole it from…
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