I recently uploaded a couple of videos I made for my original songs. I'm unsure how to go about presenting them for discussion or criticism. I'm taking a chance on this posting - please tell me if I'm being inappropriate.https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=93HyrMNuWII
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A decent pop/rock tune. Maybe a Neil Young influence? I think it could have benefited from your voice being a little higher in the mix, but it is also ok as is, other than the end, which seems cut off. Thanks for posting!
Thank you for listening and for responding,Gavin.
This isn't bad at all. People don't really do music like this anymore, it seems. Though it's not really in that style, the chords and lyrics remind me a little of something Pink Floyd might do with more electric guitar and sweeping instrumentals.
For suggestion, your voice gets drowned out in parts. Maybe the levels need adjusted a bit in those parts. I also agree with Gav. For my ear, that last chord would have been better strummed and let ring.
Usually I don't critique much on composition. What I like, the next guy may hate and vice versa, so I don't think it's fair. But if I was producing this song, I would have you put in a third part for one round, maybe right after the solo break. It would break things up a bit and make the return to the original more dramatic. I also always like it when a song's melody changes (not drastically, just a note here or there) or harmony is added on the last round.
Thanks for sharing!
Thanks for listening and for your input, Douglas! I usually write a poem and try to set it to music. My performance skills are, I know, limited and would much rather just write. Thanks again for being honest and open.