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Hello guys! Here's a piece i've been working on. In this piece, as you surely will realize, my main concern is rhythm. It also has some kind of folkloric sonorities, so the piece in general doesn't have a very classical aesthetic.
I would love to know what you think of it. I'm open to any constructive criticism.
Thank you!

https://soundcloud.com/jaime-chirif-watanabe/el-viejo-siorakidsok/s...

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It is quite an interesting piece. Nicely done as far as I am concerned. Didn't hear anything that seemed out of plae Was it a life recording? Voices seemed so real. I think it is a good piece of work.

Thanks, Erwin! I appreciate it.

It's a midi from sibelius 7. The sound library is pretty decent.

I'm hoping to play this piece live next year.

Erwin van Delft said:

It is quite an interesting piece. Nicely done as far as I am concerned. Didn't hear anything that seemed out of plae Was it a life recording? Voices seemed so real. I think it is a good piece of work.

Great piece. Love its movement and how the guitar leads. I think it must be hard to play though. 

Then you have a pretty good soundfont! Keep on writing. It is a great style you have.

I absolutely love the mood, instruments you chose, development, and musical language of the piece.

IMHO, it would sound even better with voice closer to the the center in stereo field. At least as I see it in a live performance.

Please post it, if possible, of course :)

Thank you very much, Dani S!

Dani S said:

Great piece. Love its movement and how the guitar leads. I think it must be hard to play though. 

Thank you so much, Erwin. You're really kind.

Erwin van Delft said:

Then you have a pretty good soundfont! Keep on writing. It is a great style you have.

Thank you Slava! I'm glad you like. When the piece is ready i'll try to record it :)

Slava Fiks said:

I absolutely love the mood, instruments you chose, development, and musical language of the piece.

IMHO, it would sound even better with voice closer to the the center in stereo field. At least as I see it in a live performance.

Please post it, if possible, of course :)

Hi Jamie,
I found this a highly inventive and interesting piece. Very well done. You've made this a progressive work which entertains all the way through. I can just hear it being played live.

Although there is not a lot of harmonic motion here, the rhythmic variety keeps it fresh.  I enjoyed listening.

It's unclear to me, though, what sort of sound you are seeking in the vocal line, as performed by real singers?  Are you setting text?  A lot of the vocal part moves very fast and is quite complex rhythmically.  I think it might be tough for even a well-trained singer to execute well at correct pitch, though words (as opposed to open vowels) would help that.  You might want to consider simplifying the vocal part and leaving most of the gymnastics to the other instruments.

Thank you so much, Rob! I really aprecciate it. I'm hoping to play this piece next year. Maybe in January. I'll try to record it!

Rob Kennedy said:

Hi Jamie,
I found this a highly inventive and interesting piece. Very well done. You've made this a progressive work which entertains all the way through. I can just hear it being played live.

Thank you for the feedback, DriscollMusick. 

I know what you mean about the difficulty of the voice part, but i am lucky enough to be playing with a great friend and singer who is quite comfortable with the piece. I mean, she knows how to sing both classical and popular (she can sing very tricky melodies by Egberto Gismonti, for instance). So i use her voice almost like a wind instrument.
Thank you for your comment.


DriscollMusick said:

Although there is not a lot of harmonic motion here, the rhythmic variety keeps it fresh.  I enjoyed listening.

It's unclear to me, though, what sort of sound you are seeking in the vocal line, as performed by real singers?  Are you setting text?  A lot of the vocal part moves very fast and is quite complex rhythmically.  I think it might be tough for even a well-trained singer to execute well at correct pitch, though words (as opposed to open vowels) would help that.  You might want to consider simplifying the vocal part and leaving most of the gymnastics to the other instruments.

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