The Knock (Gypsy Music)

Hi, I am not sure what type of feedback to ask for, but I am interested in any feedback at all.  

The Knock is about having the determination to start something and see it through - no matter what. Along the journey, you run into instances that introduce you to doubt, fear and discouragement.  You begin to accept these new acquaintances and once you realized that they are not a very good influence, you struggle to break free of their company, but the problem is that they are not through with you. The chase ensues until evenutally, you are standing face to face to face to face - you must decide how to proceed.

P.S. the instruments are midi produced, I know that they are not the best but I cannot afford an orchestra at the moment, please forgive me.

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  • 1) it sounds like gypsy music (mission accomplished on that one)

     

    2) To me, it sounds like immediately at the beginning the discouragement comes. The fear comes in around the middle with the doubt. I would have loved the use of the mandolin (if I am correct, that is the mandolin I hear) happen more.

     

    3) you do a really good job of controlling speed, in a 2:18 piece, it makes it sound like 10 (in a good way)

  • Alton, you have very nice structure throughout your piece and the dynamics are awesome as well. One thing I would be careful with is timpani. It sounds like you have a timpani run in the first half of your piece. There are generally only five timpani in an ensemble so you're kind of limited on range. They can be retuned in the middle of performance, but it's a bit of a delicate procedure that wouldn't be able to be done in the middle of a run. So, just be aware of the capabilities of the instruments you're using. Other than that, everything was awesome and I look forward to hearing more of your work! :)
  • Hi Alton. I liked it. It seems like you're going for tango but you go to something more hassidic (It feels more hasidic than gypsy to my ears). It's very well arranged with some diversity of moods so it feels like a complete piece even in short time. If I could do anything to make it even better would be to mess more with humor. Maybe some exaggerations in pianissimo and some bow effects. I believe it would give more personality to the piece. Something that would stick to the listener's ears you know?

     

    All best,

     

    David

  • Mr Nichols,

    Iwould like to apologize for such a late response, I have not been feeling well lately, but I am better now!

    thanks for your feedback, I am sorry to say that due to the subpar samples, the illusion of a mandolin was created but there is one in Morning Breath.

     

    As for the time, I try to keep my compositions sincere, I usually do not like to say more than I have to - i do not talk much.

     

     

    Clark Nichols said:

    1) it sounds like gypsy music (mission accomplished on that one)

     

    2) To me, it sounds like immediately at the beginning the discouragement comes. The fear comes in around the middle with the doubt. I would have loved the use of the mandolin (if I am correct, that is the mandolin I hear) happen more.

     

    3) you do a really good job of controlling speed, in a 2:18 piece, it makes it sound like 10 (in a good way)

    The Knock (Gypsy Music)
    Hi, I am not sure what type of feedback to ask for, but I am interested in any feedback at all.   The Knock is about having the determination to star…
  • Ms. Danielle,


    I apologise to you as well.  You are absolutely right about the timpani, but I figured, "why not do on the computer what you can't do for real?" I thought that it would be fun but during the live performance, I use the timp and a drum set, I change things up a bit during live performances.  I am thankful for your time and thoughts.
    Allison Danielle said:

    Alton, you have very nice structure throughout your piece and the dynamics are awesome as well. One thing I would be careful with is timpani. It sounds like you have a timpani run in the first half of your piece. There are generally only five timpani in an ensemble so you're kind of limited on range. They can be retuned in the middle of performance, but it's a bit of a delicate procedure that wouldn't be able to be done in the middle of a run. So, just be aware of the capabilities of the instruments you're using. Other than that, everything was awesome and I look forward to hearing more of your work! :)
    The Knock (Gypsy Music)
    Hi, I am not sure what type of feedback to ask for, but I am interested in any feedback at all.   The Knock is about having the determination to star…
  • Mr. Bessler,


    I offer you the same apology, please forgive me. 

    To be honest, when I wrote the piece, I had no specific genre in mind, I played what I felt and followed the images in my head as well. I wrote gypsy music in parenthesis because my neighbors always scream "musica zingara" at me, it means "Gypsy music." I have friends that agree with you as well, but for the most part, I get the "zingara" label.  Like I said before, the perfomances are usually different from the mp3, these audio files are sketches for the musicians to get the idea, but you're dead on with your suggestions. Thank you very much for you time and feedback.

     

    All the best to you all,

     

    David Bessler said:

    Hi Alton. I liked it. It seems like you're going for tango but you go to something more hassidic (It feels more hasidic than gypsy to my ears). It's very well arranged with some diversity of moods so it feels like a complete piece even in short time. If I could do anything to make it even better would be to mess more with humor. Maybe some exaggerations in pianissimo and some bow effects. I believe it would give more personality to the piece. Something that would stick to the listener's ears you know?

     

    All best,

     

    David

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