Hi All,

Looking for feedback on the orchestration/score for this 90 second cue...  Really any constructive criticism is welcome!

I realize the tempo is on the edge of playability, but I think it's all doable--let me know if you disagree.

BTW, this was my first time using Dorico, and I was pretty happy with the default engraving results, although I can't wait for true divisi to be implemented...

John

Soundcloud mockup here: https://soundcloud.com/driscollmusick/electric-test

2018 ELECTRIC Draft Score01.pdf

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  • This is great, it reminded me a little bit of Holst and I definitely mean that as a compliment.

  • hi John,

    Curious to see just one note on a synth, was there a reason for that? If you wanted a "pure" score, you could always give that to cello harmonics (perhaps trem, sul tasto or something) if you are after an alternative colour.

    There is nothing on the edge of playability as far as I can tell, although the timpanist would have to work his arms a bit -I think that is do-able. 

    I also can hear a little Holst in there (Uranus?) especially in the use of aug triads and maj/min ambiguity - that is no criticism btw as the piece is nicely put together with admirable space and restraint in the scoring, which would give a clear sound live and good motivic work too imo.

    The 1st flute at bar 7 could come up in the mix for me and you have used a unison direction for the 2 clts. in b26 instead of a2.

    Definitely media friendly too btw.

  • Thanks, Timo, for the kind words and thanks, Mike, for writing up your comments.  I guess I should provided some context.  This is a contest entry that is supposed to be a "pitch" for a film cue based on a page of script and director's notes.  So, yeah, the synth seems out of place for a concert work, but this one is just about providing a little bit of color (along the lines of musical "electricity").  I'll fix those bits you noted.  Cheers!

  • Only minor things a pedant would notice. Good luck with it John, btw how is that opera of yours coming along? I remember some nice moments in what you had posted in the past.

  • Thanks, Mike.  The opera has been on the back burner, but I hope to get on it again soon.

    Mike Hewer said:

    Only minor things a pedant would notice. Good luck with it John, btw how is that opera of yours coming along? I remember some nice moments in what you had posted in the past.

  • What's the joke, Ray?  That I live in Taos and my music is as interesting as the Milicent Rogers museum which is a mile from my house?  I was actually surprised how interesting the museum was when we moved here two years ago.  Over her lifetime, she amassed a rather impressive and diverse collection of native art.  Have you been?

    Also, you do know at your advanced age that jokes are supposed to be funny, right? (I'm joking, Ray, so you can't take offense.)  Or are you so antisocial you don't know the difference between a joke and an insult? (another joke)



    Ray Kemp said:

    I suppose you could say, it's nearly as interesting as the Millicent Rogers museum :)

    I'm joking, John.

  • The soundcloud link appears to be dead

  • Thanks, Dave.  Someone else on Facebook made a similar comment questioning the divisi... I'll have to think on that.  The basic motif is four notes and specifically in bar 5, I wanted it to sound like the entrance of a new voice, as opposed to the continuation of the first four measures (which I think is inevitable if some portion of the violin2 section are playing all eight measures).

    Dave Dexter said:

    Curious re the divisi in violins and violas - is there a reason you divide a section when you have another section unused? b5-8, for example. I'm assuming it's for the particular colour that two full sections would be overpowering for? If so you could split the upper and lower lines between vn1 and 2 and dictate "outside desks only" or "half section" or whatever's accurate, so you have the same thinner colour but physically more spread out so a wider live sound would result. Incredibly non-essential, just wondering and thinking out loud.

  • Sorry, Gav, I uploaded a new file and changed the link: https://soundcloud.com/driscollmusick/electric

    Gav Brown said:

    The soundcloud link appears to be dead

  • That "series of tubes" is always getting in the way...

    Ray Kemp said:

    When I found the soundcloud link defunct I had nothing better to say John but you're right, there is little social about interweb media compared to real 'in the same room' discussion.

    John Driscoll said:

    What's the joke, Ray?  That I live in Taos and my music is as interesting as the Milicent Rogers museum which is a mile from my house?  I was actually surprised how interesting the museum was when we moved here two years ago.  Over her lifetime, she amassed a rather impressive and diverse collection of native art.  Have you been?

    Also, you do know at your advanced age that jokes are supposed to be funny, right? (I'm joking, Ray, so you can't take offense.)  Or are you so antisocial you don't know the difference between a joke and an insult? (another joke)



    Ray Kemp said:

    I suppose you could say, it's nearly as interesting as the Millicent Rogers museum :)

    I'm joking, John.

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