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Very nice piece. Very good text setting and harmonic language. The music fits the text very well.
My only criticisms is that I felt that the piano was almost to climax more satisfyingly than the vocal line. When the piece was finish I was just kind of wanting more. The other one is that I felt the opening didnt really fit with the rest of the piece.
Other than that this is a fantastic piece. Great Job.
Driscoll, this is a beautifully haunting piece.. (I am reminded a bit in flavor - of the Villa Lobos Vocalise, which i love.)
I wasn't sure about the intro either.. (unless preceded by another vocal piece, and it works as more transitionary material..)
Thank you for posting!
This is quite a lovely song. The harmonic progressions and text setting have a seemingly effortless flow to them. Classical song ("art song"?) is a very underrated genre, and I wish there were more songs like this on this site.
I share both of Tyler's concerns, and I think these two concerns are actually related: part of why the ending feels so unsatisfying is because the piece started with such a firm sense of motive and tonality. When you don't bring this back later, it creates an imbalance. Although you bring the arpeggio idea back at the end, the repeated C major thing feels extraneous to the piece.
Given the nature of the poem, I understand why you don't resolve the last chord, but it still feels like it needs something else--maybe just a few more repeated echoes of the arpeggio motive or another chromatic chord--to really let the unresolved sensation sink in.
Other than that, great work!
Thanks for the feedback, all. Given its age, I am probably not going to revise this song further, but at some point I will combine it one or two others in a set. I think that may help address some of the issues you've brought up.
I totally disagree with that perspective, Rodney, but don't have the time to spend getting into it with you. Thanks.
While I very much appreciate all the feedback, none of the comments were technical, but were reactions to an imbalance in the structure/shape of the song that was wholly intentional.
I read the comments, thought about them and realize the issue. Moreover, I plan to address it. But my solution is to write/finish the few other songs that will live with it, not revise this particular song. Sorry if that's not the decision you (someone who never offered any actual feedback on the song) were looking for...
One final point: I do in fact live in the real world. This means my time is valuable and I need to prioritize my use of it. It's also why this will be my last contribution to a "conversation" that is pretty much now about you.