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  • There are some good things and their are somethings that could be improved upon. 

    You have a good command over the your sound samples, and I like some of your artistic choices. 

    What can be improved upon:

    Your harmonic choices were a tad on the repetitive side. You rarely venture away from this very predictable and slightly over used chord progression, which can make the piece very stagnate. You also do not explore other keys, no modulations, no sudden key change. I wish you were a little more harmonically daring to break up the monotony of 4 bar phrases. 

    Another thing to improve is dynamics. I feel you rely to heavily on orchestration and adding and subtracting instruments for dynamics instead of just using dynamics. 

    I also have two personal gripes that are more of an aesthetic complaint (feel free to take these are not).

    I personally do not like arpeggiated base lines. They are a go to for most composers starting out and easy listening artist, but I just dont like them. Especially when it makes up the entire piece. 

    Another issue I had is the ending. I am with Bob here, this piece needed a proper ending. To me, a faded ending is a cop-out when you dont know how to end a piece. Unless you are writing pop music, one has to do a LOT of justifying to why they would include a faded ending to a piece of instrumental classical music. 

    like I said, these last two things are personal things which can be taken with a grain of salt. 

    The other things I mentioned I really feel that if you were to improve upon, you music would rise to a whole other level. Having not heard any other music from you nor knowing your compositional background I can only surmise that you are still a somewhat novice composer so their is still a lot of room for growth. Good luck and good job. 

  • Thanks for the indepth suggestions. I've no classical music training and almost zero knowledge music theory and therefore I am having a difficult time improving on my own. Once again I am grateful for your input.

    Tyler Hughes said:

    There are some good things and their are somethings that could be improved upon. 

    You have a good command over the your sound samples, and I like some of your artistic choices. 

    What can be improved upon:

    Your harmonic choices were a tad on the repetitive side. You rarely venture away from this very predictable and slightly over used chord progression, which can make the piece very stagnate. You also do not explore other keys, no modulations, no sudden key change. I wish you were a little more harmonically daring to break up the monotony of 4 bar phrases. 

    Another thing to improve is dynamics. I feel you rely to heavily on orchestration and adding and subtracting instruments for dynamics instead of just using dynamics. 

    I also have two personal gripes that are more of an aesthetic complaint (feel free to take these are not).

    I personally do not like arpeggiated base lines. They are a go to for most composers starting out and easy listening artist, but I just dont like them. Especially when it makes up the entire piece. 

    Another issue I had is the ending. I am with Bob here, this piece needed a proper ending. To me, a faded ending is a cop-out when you dont know how to end a piece. Unless you are writing pop music, one has to do a LOT of justifying to why they would include a faded ending to a piece of instrumental classical music. 

    like I said, these last two things are personal things which can be taken with a grain of salt. 

    The other things I mentioned I really feel that if you were to improve upon, you music would rise to a whole other level. Having not heard any other music from you nor knowing your compositional background I can only surmise that you are still a somewhat novice composer so their is still a lot of room for growth. Good luck and good job. 

    Gone with the rain.
    Simple piece, piano + bit of strings. It's a bit slow at start... Please comment and enjoy.
  • Thanks for the feed back.

    Saul Dzorelashvili said:

    Familier chord progressions, repetitious, lack of originality.

    Gone with the rain.
    Simple piece, piano + bit of strings. It's a bit slow at start... Please comment and enjoy.
  • It was purely for fun. Thanks a bunch for the suggestions, I am glad you've enjoyed it.



    Bob Porter said:

    I enjoyed this piece, thanks for posting it.

    Tell us why you wrote it. Is it part of a portfolio? I am easily distracted by photos posted with music. I would rather the music support what I see, rather than what I see just being there as an afterthought.

    To me, this piece needs an ending. Even rain ends sometime.

    There are three notes that, for me, don't fit the mode you are in. If we had a score, I could tell you which ones.

    Gone with the rain.
    Simple piece, piano + bit of strings. It's a bit slow at start... Please comment and enjoy.
  • Then might I suggest this:

    https://composersforum.ning.com/forum/topics/the-growing-composer-li...

    Mazzii said:

    Thanks for the indepth suggestions. I've no classical music training and almost zero knowledge music theory and therefore I am having a difficult time improving on my own. Once again I am grateful for your input.

    Tyler Hughes said:

    There are some good things and their are somethings that could be improved upon. 

    You have a good command over the your sound samples, and I like some of your artistic choices. 

    What can be improved upon:

    Your harmonic choices were a tad on the repetitive side. You rarely venture away from this very predictable and slightly over used chord progression, which can make the piece very stagnate. You also do not explore other keys, no modulations, no sudden key change. I wish you were a little more harmonically daring to break up the monotony of 4 bar phrases. 

    Another thing to improve is dynamics. I feel you rely to heavily on orchestration and adding and subtracting instruments for dynamics instead of just using dynamics. 

    I also have two personal gripes that are more of an aesthetic complaint (feel free to take these are not).

    I personally do not like arpeggiated base lines. They are a go to for most composers starting out and easy listening artist, but I just dont like them. Especially when it makes up the entire piece. 

    Another issue I had is the ending. I am with Bob here, this piece needed a proper ending. To me, a faded ending is a cop-out when you dont know how to end a piece. Unless you are writing pop music, one has to do a LOT of justifying to why they would include a faded ending to a piece of instrumental classical music. 

    like I said, these last two things are personal things which can be taken with a grain of salt. 

    The other things I mentioned I really feel that if you were to improve upon, you music would rise to a whole other level. Having not heard any other music from you nor knowing your compositional background I can only surmise that you are still a somewhat novice composer so their is still a lot of room for growth. Good luck and good job. 

    The growing composer (Links and Resources for the beggining and self taught composer)
    I am creating this thread mainly for fellow composer Tristan, but I feel that these link can benefit any motivated composer who is just starting out…
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