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Hi!

This is a piece, I wrote lately. I will appreciate comments and criticism. 

https://youtu.be/Osxld_FAuNA

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Hi, Szymon,

Well, an impressive piece and about the right length for the thematic material you use.

I wasn't quite sure what to make of it though. Is it a standalone concert piece; a game clip?

The balance and gradual build up were very good.

My crits are few and minor. It centred on the same tonality all though - seemed like a natural minor key (aeolian?) with an occasional excursion into the relative major. The second point was the voice in the earlier part always had a soft attack as opposed to, say, starting the phrase with a soft attack then going on through the phrase as a legato or at the same dynamic.

But these are just my thoughts/reaction as I listened. 

All good.

Dane

Hi Dane,

Thank you for your comments. This is a standalone piece without any specific purpose (I write only for me and started to share it some time ago). I intended to write this piece in natural minor and to build the tension using dynamics and instrumentation only. Especially for practice purposes. Finally, I noticed it was insufficient and I introduced slight harmonic variations. I really like various modulations, but in this case tried to keep it simple and to focus on other aspects. Anyhow, thank you for noticing this.

Regarding the voice. I was not completely satisfied with the voice, but could not exactly define why. As I was quite satisfied and could not obtain better result, I left it as it is. I will try to take improve it, taking your remark into account.

Insightful feedback is very valuable for me, as I always try to improve my works. Thank you very much once again!

Best regards 

Szymon

Hello Szymon,

it is a well crafted piece. I like what I hear, it is a powerful work well suited to enforce a story of some kind. Could maybe be a nice idea to tell that story.

Well done.

Kjell

Thank you very much :)

Kjell Prytz said:

Hello Szymon,

it is a well crafted piece. I like what I hear, it is a powerful work well suited to enforce a story of some kind. Could maybe be a nice idea to tell that story.

Well done.

Kjell

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