Feedback on my score

Hi guys, first time poster here.

I entered a national film composition competition here in Australia for the 4th time and didn't get shortlisted. Basically an organisation gives us a 5 minute film and we have to create a score for it. I would love to get some feedback on it and any tips to make a better score in the future.
You can find my score here:

Thanks guys,


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  • The first sequence, which leads up to the little boy depositing the ping pong ball in the wooden dummy's mouth, seems like it should call for either music which is a slow, low, and steady build towards a tension breaking moment, or maybe just a low hum which moves around slightly and has a feeling of dread about it. I get what you are trying to do with the 4-note "child's motif," but it doesn't work and after a few times becomes repetitive. Something like this requires more mood and color rather than melody IMO. The score is well done, it's just not right for scene.

  • Hey thanks for your feedback, I know it's a very typical "evil child" sound to use a music box with a creepy melody, when I got that melody in my head I couldn't get it out, which indicated to me that it was worth pursuing. I did use low hums in that score but I was afraid that that would get boring, as opposed to overuse of the melody. Appreciate it.
  • Fascinating. What a great idea for a competition! It's a very nicely done film scene, and I think you've done a nice job scoring it, very restrained and understated, yet effective. I think I know, however, why you didn't make the cut (no pun intended). Those high notes on, what is it, a glockenspiel, celesta?, are very effective at first, but get repeated so often they begin to call attention to themselves and distract from the visuals.

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