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Feedback on my score

Posted by Jack Hookey on January 31, 2013 at 9:41pm in Music Analysis and Critique

Hi guys, first time poster here.

I entered a national film composition competition here in Australia for the 4th time and didn't get shortlisted. Basically an organisation gives us a 5 minute film and we have to create a score for it. I would love to get some feedback on it and any tips to make a better score in the future.
You can find my score here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IJ3ily5yu48

Thanks guys,

Jack.

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  • Gavin Brown January 31, 2013 at 10:50pm

    The first sequence, which leads up to the little boy depositing the ping pong ball in the wooden dummy's mouth, seems like it should call for either music which is a slow, low, and steady build towards a tension breaking moment, or maybe just a low hum which moves around slightly and has a feeling of dread about it. I get what you are trying to do with the 4-note "child's motif," but it doesn't work and after a few times becomes repetitive. Something like this requires more mood and color rather than melody IMO. The score is well done, it's just not right for scene.

  • Jack Hookey February 1, 2013 at 9:08am
    Hey thanks for your feedback, I know it's a very typical "evil child" sound to use a music box with a creepy melody, when I got that melody in my head I couldn't get it out, which indicated to me that it was worth pursuing. I did use low hums in that score but I was afraid that that would get boring, as opposed to overuse of the melody. Appreciate it.
  • Victor Grauer February 1, 2013 at 3:13pm

    Fascinating. What a great idea for a competition! It's a very nicely done film scene, and I think you've done a nice job scoring it, very restrained and understated, yet effective. I think I know, however, why you didn't make the cut (no pun intended). Those high notes on, what is it, a glockenspiel, celesta?, are very effective at first, but get repeated so often they begin to call attention to themselves and distract from the visuals.

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