Here is my most recently composed piece for Grade I students.  All feedback welcome, particularly feedback regarding measures 39 and 40, as I am trying to improve my compositional abilities the best I can!

Thank you in advance

StaffPad Simple Duet for Piano and Violin (4).pdf

duet for violin and piano.mp3

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  • The piano and the violin sit well with each other. I really like where their sound is taking me. 

    A young couple is holding hands and walking down a desolate alley way. The parents of both boy and girl do not agree with their relationship. There is a great sadness and division within their families, but walk they must. 

    There is an old man sitting on the edge of his bed. There is a clutter of boxes strew about on the floor. He is holding a black and white photo of his deceased wife. 

    The piano is the boxes - The violin are streaming tears.

    As we follow this music’s journey to the end:

    The boxes are alone.

    The man is dead.

    The photo falls to the floor.

    But your ending is beautiful. The shift in pitch expressed hope.

    The young couple are walking hand in hand into the sunset. A new beginning is with them. 

  • I like it, Hunter. I like it a lot, in fact. There have been some definite improvements put to really good use here. The piano part has a minimalist feel that carries you along quite soothingly, but in such a way that it's rather hard to place precisely what emotion might be behind it, and which I consider a plus. The only qualm I have at all with it is that in a couple of places the violin seems a little too tentative, as if you weren't quite sure what you wanted to do with it. But those parts are very brief and don't really detract from the overall effect. Very nice work here, man. Keep it up, for sure.  

  • Paul, could you be a little more specific as to which parts are tentative?  Please reference time (say 0:00 - 00:30) or measure (preferably measure).

  • On a second, closer listening, I started thinking that maybe you ought to try to put in some counter-melodies in the violin part to the piano part, instead of following it quite so closely. You know what I mean? Maybe try to give it more of its own voice.

  • Let me break out the notepad and give it a good close listen, ok? Might take a few minutes, though...

    Hunter Bolton said:

    Paul, could you be a little more specific as to which parts are tentative?  Please reference time (say 0:00 - 00:30) or measure (preferably measure).

    Duet for Violin and Piano
    Here is my most recently composed piece for Grade I students.  All feedback welcome, particularly feedback regarding measures 39 and 40, as I am tryi…
  • In measures 17, 36, and 54, I feel like you ought to make a change which would be more fitting for the somber character of the piece. For example, in measure 17, the note ends too abruptly, imo. The same is true for the other two tied notes starting in measures 36, and then in 54. I just feel that if you made the quarter-note tied to a half-note instead in each of those, the effect would be nicer. Also, as I said earlier, if you could work in some more counter-melody in the violins, it would add additional interest for the listener. As said, though, all in all, not a bad effort at all.

    Hunter Bolton said:

    Paul, could you be a little more specific as to which parts are tentative?  Please reference time (say 0:00 - 00:30) or measure (preferably measure).

    Duet for Violin and Piano
    Here is my most recently composed piece for Grade I students.  All feedback welcome, particularly feedback regarding measures 39 and 40, as I am tryi…
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