3.4.0 (Where to go from here?)

I spent more time looking at the score than listening, so these comments are mainly structural, but that may help you on where to progress to.

1st 4 bars, consider as theme a. Next 4 bars are like a repeat, with variation - a' - with bars 5 and 6 identical and the moving away from a straight repeat in 7 and 8. The next section causes me some trouble, as 9 is the same as 4, 10=1 and 11=2, 12 is similar to 3, but varied - another variation but this time it's the order that's changing. 13 =9, so start of next 4 bars, looking to vary order again?

The whole leaves me with the feeling that this is the development stage of a theme, so consider using the first 4 bars as a theme, stated in full at the start. Consider a 2nd theme, and develop that in similar fashion. A mini sonata, in other words.

HTH

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Alan MacRae April 25, 2015 at 7:29am

I spent more time looking at the score than listening, so these comments are mainly structural, but that may help you on where to progress to.

1st 4 bars, consider as theme a. Next 4 bars are like a repeat, with variation - a' - with bars 5 and 6 identical and the moving away from a straight repeat in 7 and 8. The next section causes me some trouble, as 9 is the same as 4, 10=1 and 11=2, 12 is similar to 3, but varied - another variation but this time it's the order that's changing. 13 =9, so start of next 4 bars, looking to vary order again?

The whole leaves me with the feeling that this is the development stage of a theme, so consider using the first 4 bars as a theme, stated in full at the start. Consider a 2nd theme, and develop that in similar fashion. A mini sonata, in other words.

HTH
Bobby Popolla April 27, 2015 at 4:56pm

Thank you both Susan and Alan! Your comments are really helpful and I will keep them in mind when I dive back into my piece.

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