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Hello colleagues,

I've never written for flute before and am working on a piece which is at a very early stage, interested in any feedback you have. This is not by any stretch a complete work, in fact, it just stops where I have composed up to. Any thoughts you have about it/suggestions for improvement, please do share, and thanks in advance -

Gav

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Hi Gav--

This is a really good, fun, quite hummable piece, with easy to remember tunes, which makes it very easy for the listener to "make friends" with the music. The main tune stays with one ALL day, which is a VERY good sign!

I found the middle very interesting, at about 1:09--

and at about :25 the counter melody and tune seem to possibly get jumbled up in each other to me

Really good job and I look forward to hearing the finished work--thanks so much for sharing!

Bob https://soundcloud.com/bob-morabito

Thanks for the feedback Bob, I had a question about the melodies intermixing in a jumbled up fashion at the two points you mention, wanted to see if anyone else picked up on it. I'll look at this section, I think it does need a little revision. 

Thanks again!

Gav

Youre very welcome Gav--again I look forward to hearing the final piece:)

Just to be sure I pointed out 1:09 and on not as the countermelody small problem but as being very interesting..to me, it really is EXCELLENT writing there. Its my favorite part!

Thanks Bob https://soundcloud.com/bob-morabito

I really wouldn't change anything Gav - I think it's delightfully composed and very fitting for a flute's strengths.

Thanks both Bob and Charles! Once I get a little further along, I'll come back and post an in-progress update, I'm actually trying a bit of an experiment here, as I usually don't post anything less than completed works. Since this is a new instrument for me, I thought I'd get some feedback before things get too "set in stone."

Thanks again!

Hi Gav - I'm always careful with flutes because they can be shrill to my ear, but this piece is light and memorable and therefore likable I feel. 

As far as suggestions I'm curious as to the goal you might have for this piece. It would be a great piece for students I think but you might want to think in terms of an etude then and throw in some modulations early on in order to get more exercise value from the repetitions of your opening theme.

If you intend to aim this piece at a wider audience my ear wants a third instrument to balance out the flute sound, but this is my opinion only of course. I also would like to hear more development of the opening theme since it is repeated a number of times.

Thanks for posting this!

Hi Ingo, thanks for listening and for your comments. I am writing this for LKR Sheet Music, a publishing site with a classical bent. I've been on there a while and have decided to take it as a challenge to write music that falls outside of my normal type of composition. They already have a piece I wrote for French Horn, which I also put up here for comment recently. Regarding your specific comments > The opening theme is repeated a lot, for sure, still thinking about whether I want to take any steps towards modifying that. I do want to add more key changes, there's a little bit of that in the piece already. > interested to know what 3rd instrument you would suggest adding. > developing the opening theme more - thinking about this - 

Thanks again!
Gav

I would guess that one of your publisher's main markets would be for educational materials. There's always a need for reasonably priced beginning and intermediate material in sheet music form. There are lots of etudes out there already but I'm sure that something that is "educational" without being boring or frustrating for students would be useful. So anything that explores different keys, ranges, rhythms and dynamics would be good as long as it is playable. Little surprises and "easter eggs" that make things interesting are helpful too.

With that in mind I think the duet format is great, flute teachers have multiple flutists available, perhaps even a trio?  Or add a piano since those are usually available as well.

To develop a theme you could do a passacaglia or chaconne form; have the players trade off playing the repeated theme against a variation. Or traditional classical thematic development, lots written about that and others here know much more about that than I do.

Just my opinion here, I'm no expert!

Gav Brown said:

Hi Ingo, thanks for listening and for your comments. I am writing this for LKR Sheet Music, a publishing site with a classical bent. I've been on there a while and have decided to take it as a challenge to write music that falls outside of my normal type of composition. They already have a piece I wrote for French Horn, which I also put up here for comment recently. Regarding your specific comments > The opening theme is repeated a lot, for sure, still thinking about whether I want to take any steps towards modifying that. I do want to add more key changes, there's a little bit of that in the piece already. > interested to know what 3rd instrument you would suggest adding. > developing the opening theme more - thinking about this - 

Thanks again!
Gav

Thanks again Ingo, you've given me a lot to think about!

Gav,

     Enjoyed this piece.  You repeat the theme too often, especially at the beginning.  At measure 15 take the theme up a third or a fifth.  Otherwise there is plenty of variation throughout.  You could add piano accompaniment to make this a recital piece for junior high or high school.

Thanks Lawrence for listening and for the idea about the melody. Going to work on this soon and may be swinging back around with an update at some point (or a finished piece perhaps). 

Thanks again!

Gav

Hi Gav, this has some merit and potential, to my ear. My first thought was ' a cello' as a counterpart.

This though is an example of what I have said about writing a 'linear time' piece as opposed to a 'conceptual' time

piece. It could just be my sense of music, but I find 'crossed wires' and a kind of haphazard wandering in this.

Kudos Gav for branching out and adding to your skills. Trial and error are often the road to success. Never stop trying. RS

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