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This is my first real attempt at writing a choral piece in another language other than English and Latin. This is also one of my more conservative pieces. Let me know what you think and if you speak German let me know if the text is set correctly. 

*note the vocal parts are replaced with woodwinds for clarity of vocal parts. Flutes are soprano, clarinets are altos, horns are tenors, and bassoons are bass.*

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I like that a lot. I loved the movement. It's a bit tough to think of those instruments as voices, but they worked well as instruments also, and the interplay between them, and between them and the piano, was excellent. Really enjoyed the piano all by itself, those longs sweeping runs.

Very nice piece, certainly works instrumentally if the singers don't show up.  Your smooth phrasing belies all the meter changes hiding in there.  Nice recorded sound as well, can you share with us your scoring and sound library choices, and did you write at the keyboard or just straight to score?  I'm not normally too conservative, I'll have to check out some of your more liberal pieces. :-)

Tyler, I find this particularly interesting because I've recently finished my own version of Wessobrunner Gebet composed for SATB with organ accompaniment. Your piece certainly works instrumentally but I think I probably lack the imagination to 'hear' the instruments as voices.

Interestingly (or not), because the gebet may be translated into English as a Poem (or) hymn about the 'Creation' I have treated it as a very religious piece...I'd be interested to hear your views so will post it in a few minutes.

Thank you for sharing this with us. 

Hi Tyler,

The music sounds nice, but as promised I have taken a look at the text. Most of it is in order, but there are a couple of small things to change.

die Erde (with a capital)

das Wunder

Actually, that is all. The rest looks perfect.

This is very nice. The language is "conservative," as you say, but still recognizably modern, and very colorful (more colorful and interesting, really, than most contemporary choral pieces. A lot of choral music is harmonically conservative just because that's easier to sing!)

From an aesthetic standpoint, the only thing that bothered me a little was this: the most striking point in the piece seems to be m. 11--the piano and choir are near their maximum note density and the sopranos are at the top of their range. When you don't bring this texture back as fully later in the piece (when it returns briefly in the middle, it's shorter and the choral ranges are more conservative) I feel a bit let down--it's a little like the old saw about putting a gun on stage in Act 1 but not firing it by the end of the play.

My suggestion (for whatever it's worth) would be to bring the 32nd-note runs in the piano back at m. 47--this might be a nice blossoming of the momentum that's been building so well since m. 40 and would help satisfy the expectations you put in place back at m. 11. And you're in F# major here, so the pianist could do some nice flourishes using just the black keys, without the need for any acrobatic fingerings.

The text setting seems good to me--there are a few things that came across as slightly awkward (e.g. the registral and rhythmic emphasis on "der" in the sopranos in m. 13), but these are pretty minor (especially for an English speaking audience). And my German isn't great, but shouldn't Stern (m. 24), Meer (m. 31), and Geister (m. 56) also be capitalized? Omitting capital letters could (potentially) alter the meaning.

Other than that, really nice. I hope there's a chance of hearing this performed live.

The sounds you are hearing come as the default sounds from Finale's playback. In this piece I wrote straight to score, as I do with pretty much all of my pieces. 

Ingo Lee said:

Very nice piece, certainly works instrumentally if the singers don't show up.  Your smooth phrasing belies all the meter changes hiding in there.  Nice recorded sound as well, can you share with us your scoring and sound library choices, and did you write at the keyboard or just straight to score?  I'm not normally too conservative, I'll have to check out some of your more liberal pieces. :-)

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