Started with a few notes... Improvising now written out. Dissect please!

[Jonathan White]

Hey i actually started this piece with a little improvising at the university of Florida but i really got into it so this one of the few pieces i invested time to write out. Enjoy and critics will be appreciated!

Edit: Hey again! Thanks for all the wonderful comments this is the new recording! Please listen and dissect!

[William Randal Bowers]

This is beautiful! I just... can't even comprehend. I was listening to it, the passion... it's wonderful.

[Jonathan White]

Thank you so much! You don't understand how much that means to me!!!

William Randal Bowers said:

This is beautiful! I just... can't even comprehend. I was listening to it, the passion... it's wonderful.

[Ann Rodela]

Jothnathan, this is very good! The mood started with an air of mystery, but after two cadences the music expresses a deep passion and it is beautiful. The ending motive starts with a dramatic flaire and ends complete. I would not change a thing!

[Jonathan White]

Thank you very much Ann, comments like yours and William's are what inspire me to keep composing. I am in the processes of writing it out and once i've practiced it and gotten down the fingering i would love for you to hear it!

Ann Rodela said:

Jothnathan, this is very good! The mood started with an air of mystery, but after two cadences the music expresses a deep passion and it is beautiful. The ending motive starts with a dramatic flaire and ends complete. I would not change a thing!

[Ann Rodela]

Thank you. I would like to hear it. :)

[Grant]

I love how moody it is, brilliant excursion into a ragtime feel then back to moody wonderful dissonance. Loved it!

[Jonathan White]

Thank you, the ragtime was my initial intention for the whole piece, but it turned out quiet different!
Grant said:

I love how moody it is, brilliant excursion into a ragtime feel then back to moody wonderful dissonance. Loved it!

[Adrian Allan]

Very good indeed. Let's see the score now.

What I had in mind hearing it was Victorian melodrama; you write in a very Romantic style with all those diminished runs.

It is very rhapsodic and free in form.

Maybe the next piece you do you could try to rein in the structure a bit more, as there is almost too much going on; but that comes with experience.

You have the romantic excesses of youth !

[Ann Rodela]

Your music is very good!

[Jonathan White]

Thank you Adrian, that a comment i've heard before ;) What i need is something to write about that i believe could give my music more structure.

Adrian Allan said:

Very good indeed. Let's see the score now.

What I had in mind hearing it was Victorian melodrama; you write in a very Romantic style with all those diminished runs.

It is very rhapsodic and free in form.

Maybe the next piece you do you could try to rein in the structure a bit more, as there is almost too much going on; but that comes with experience.

You have the romantic excesses of youth !

[Jonathan White]

Hey Forum! Just rerecorded my piece with some extra edition! Enjoy!

[Ann Rodela]

Very good!