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Hi! This is my first post here about one of my first piano pieces. I recently finished the first draft of a short Piano sonatina in B minor. Any comments would be appreciated but keep in mind this is work in progress. Thanks! :)

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Quite enjoyed this.

Why there is a Gb and not an F# in bar 2 defeats me. I think you also need double bar lines for major time signature and tempo changes - bar 17.

The faster theme was ok, but I found the intervals of the 5ths a bit boring after a while - hammering away in 5ths will always give your music a raw/ folk feel. I would have varied it with thirds and sixths. Also some more borrowed chords like diminished 7ths to break the repetition of the primary chords would have added interest. Keep composing and playing and you will enrich your harmonic palette as time goes on.

So, nice tune, but just a bit more harmonic variety.

Thanks a lot for the feedback, Adrian. You can't imagine how I appreciate it! 

Haha, the Gb/F# is a stupid mistake, i must've missed it in the process. :D Also thanks for the advice on double bar lines - it's certainly necessary when such major changes occur. I'll fix it  right away.

About the fifts - maybe there's some need for variation - i'll try to do something about it . The raw feel was intended as i wanted it to be in contrast with the lyrical first theme. :)

Again thanks for the advices and the nice words. 

Adrian Allan said:

Quite enjoyed this.

Why there is a Gb and not an F# in bar 2 defeats me. I think you also need double bar lines for major time signature and tempo changes - bar 17.

The faster theme was ok, but I found the intervals of the 5ths a bit boring after a while - hammering away in 5ths will always give your music a raw/ folk feel. I would have varied it with thirds and sixths. Also some more borrowed chords like diminished 7ths to break the repetition of the primary chords would have added interest. Keep composing and playing and you will enrich your harmonic palette as time goes on.

So, nice tune, but just a bit more harmonic variety.

Thank you so much, Sahil. Very glad you liked the piece. :) I actually had the idea of developing the first theme but after a while i thought it's not so good and turned to the faster theme. I'll try to do something with it. Thanks :)

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