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I like this, and I agree that your production is much better. It is very spare at this point but haunting. Not that I'm in a position to give you advice, but I'd just get it all down and wait until later to concern myself about adding more complexity (counterpoint, etc.) and embellishing.
Wow you really moved me. What software are you using ?
Sounds very good to me. Always like to see the PDF or the midi to find out what's going on, but I thought that it captured the mood very well. You've got so much better on the production side, although I'm over interested in that (leave it to the techies I say). My only criticisms are that about 2:00 I might have liked more counterpoint in the strings and around 3:50 I might have moved the quavers at the end of the bar in the brass (against the string arpeggios) to other instrument groups, but maybe the instrumentation is evolving.