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Featuring a Live 4 string Alembic bass guitar and electric piano. I was originally writing this piece for a film and just kept going with it and having fun with it. Please tell me what you think.

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Justin,

This piece has some things to recommend it. I found the percussive sounds overall interesting and energetic. The production values are sterling. Yet I feel like I kept waiting for the actual piece to begin. There's quite a lot of piano playing in it, yet it felt to me more like accompaniment rather than a lead melody. I kept wanting to hear another instrument appear on top of it, perhaps a violin playing a slow melody to contrast the fast pace of all the other sounds. Thanks for posting to the forum and I look forward to hearing other things from you!

I like the percussion. The tormenting of the genius, hmm, it sounds more like a (good) 80ies synthtune for a party in germany. (Everyone is happy.)

And try to write a melody for it, as gav said. There are only arpeggios now, not that they are bad, but a melody could make this really intriguing and worth more than one listen.

Justin, I like this as is. It has an energetic pace to it and seems to have a  more

 layered and 3-D as opposed to a linear melody.  Nice work.  RS(the amateur)

Thank you for your input. I really appreciate the part about the production. I personally don't know how I could have fit another instrument since at the present time I worked with a Mac G5 and I can hardly get another track in there. This is the remix to the original piece that I was going to use for an independent film and instead I played with it for fun. Thank you again!


Gav Brown said:

Justin,

This piece has some things to recommend it. I found the percussive sounds overall interesting and energetic. The production values are sterling. Yet I feel like I kept waiting for the actual piece to begin. There's quite a lot of piano playing in it, yet it felt to me more like accompaniment rather than a lead melody. I kept wanting to hear another instrument appear on top of it, perhaps a violin playing a slow melody to contrast the fast pace of all the other sounds. Thanks for posting to the forum and I look forward to hearing other things from you!

Thank you for your input.

Per-Erik Rosqvist said:

I like the percussion. The tormenting of the genius, hmm, it sounds more like a (good) 80ies synthtune for a party in germany. (Everyone is happy.)

And try to write a melody for it, as gav said. There are only arpeggios now, not that they are bad, but a melody could make this really intriguing and worth more than one listen.

Thank you for your input. I really appreciate you taking the time and commenting on this piece. I am always trying to improve. 

roger stancill said:

Justin, I like this as is. It has an energetic pace to it and seems to have a  more

 layered and 3-D as opposed to a linear melody.  Nice work.  RS(the amateur)

Fredrick, This piece is written in a minor key and has a baroque and VERY gothic layer to it behind all the modern sounds. Thats where the "tormented genius" or "Frankenstein" name came about. That being said I could name this piece anything and I was not concerned with the title. As far as it being " very very very tonal" that doesn't even make sense and is unintelligible. Then you state that it rhythmically "presents no challenges" and Why should it? The drums do what are designed to and they are tailored to this track. Complication or challenging does not necessarily make things better. As I stated in the description this was originally for a film, and film music is usually relatively simple but the sounds and composing should be of high caliber if its done well to effect the desired mood in a powerful way. All that being I have been composing for a very short time and am trying to improve and that is why I joined this site. I get your point though, the piece is "unoriginal" and "unchallenging", thanks Fredrick. Why do you feel the need to be a Fredrick, This piece is written in a minor key and has a baroque and VERY gothic layer to it behind all the modern sounds. Thats where the "tormented genius" or "Frankenstein" name came about. That being said I could name this piece anything and I was not concerned with the title. As far as it being " very very very tonal" that doesn't even make sense and is unintelligible. Then you state that it rhythmically "presents no challenges" and Why should it? The drums do what are designed to and they are tailored to this track. Complication or challenging does not necessarily make things better. As I stated in the description this was originally for a film, and film music is usually relatively simple but the sounds and composing should be of high caliber if its done well to effect the desired mood in a powerful way. All that being I have been composing for a very short time and am trying to improve and that is why I joined this site. Now let me ask you a question, why do you feel the need to be a complete jerk? I am all for constructive criticism but not pompous negative wind like you have provided.

I don't understand? 

Justin, if your going to survive, your going to have to let the 'technocrats'

           have their say, without taking it so personally. Just 'weed' through

           it and take from it what helps you grow and 'dump' the rest.

           Food for thought........ RS

                     

Thanks you. At least your are looking out for your fellow musician. I appreciate it.

roger stancill said:

Justin, if your going to survive, your going to have to let the 'technocrats'

           have their say, without taking it so personally. Just 'weed' through

           it and take from it what helps you grow and 'dump' the rest.

           Food for thought........ RS

                     

Fred Fred Ferd, must you go toe to toe ? here's an adult word ' grace'  comprendo senior?

The "Tormented Genius" was not so much referring to myself as the visual the track gave me. As I stated a "Frankenstein" in his Gothic castle with a modern twist. The Drums are supposed to be straightforward and there sound is of a very high quality for a home studio. I do not want to change them, I like them very much as they are and so do others who have commented. however, at least this time your critique was intelligible and I could see your perspective beyond just a seemingly grumpy negative man...

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