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I thought that this was a nice piano-based ballad. You are obviously well versed in modern piano ballads. Sounds like it should be sung - I wonder if there are words ?

What lets it down in terms of production is the very repetitive drum beat (no drummer would play with so little variety all the way through). 3/4 of the way through the brass interlude sounds very synthetic - the samples need re-thinking here and the ending not on the tonic chord seemed a little too unexpected for this ballad style.

So In summary I think that as a ballad or a song it has great potential. I didn't really like the attempt to make it into something different - but maybe this is because the brass section didn't really grab me at all.
Thanks. I agree with you about the horns. Thought I'd try it anyway.
Also there are lyrics to all compositions.

Adrian Allan said:
I thought that this was a nice piano-based ballad. You are obviously well versed in modern piano ballads. Sounds like it should be sung - I wonder if there are words ?

What lets it down in terms of production is the very repetitive drum beat (no drummer would play with so little variety all the way through). 3/4 of the way through the brass interlude sounds very synthetic - the samples need re-thinking here and the ending not on the tonic chord seemed a little too unexpected for this ballad style.

So In summary I think that as a ballad or a song it has great potential. I didn't really like the attempt to make it into something different - but maybe this is because the brass section didn't really grab me at all.
I like it, and I like the interplay between the piano and the strings. I agree with Adrian about the drums. I think drums are typically one of the hardest production elements for non-drummers (I'm speaking as a non-drummer). It might help to listen to some pop pianists (such as Tori Amos or Vanessa Carlton) to see what kinds of percussion and rhythms they use. Here is a link to the Vanessa Carlton song A Thousand Miles. It has an interesting arrangement: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pnkvhi1XOR8.

As far as the horns go, I think they can work, but they need to be played evenly, and the volume should be turned down on them because they are overpowering the rest of the instruments and out of balance.

Recently someone on this site recalled this quote: When they asked Michelangelo how he made his statue of David he is reported to have said, "It is easy. You just chip away the stone that doesn't look like David." This quote has really helped me as I continue to work on a few instrumentals. I no longer just accept what I think is good. I now try to strip away any element (no matter how small) that doesn't seem to fit the character of a piece, and if something seems to be missing I keep experimenting until I locate it.
The lyrics are for a female voice, but could work well with a male voice also. I think it would be easier to place a voice if the piano wasn't playing the melody. Thank you all so much for your comments. Have a happy thanksgiving.

Peace
I am not sure as to which song you are referring, but I am new to the technological end of recording. I have played an accoustic piano all of my life until a few months ago. I am trying to learn how to use the volume controls etc. Please bare with me. I love that song by the way.

Ray Kemp said:
Did the bass player not turn up?
First time through with no bass would be fine but then you would expect electric bass and kick drum to join in and give the mix some body. There are thousands of examples out there but one that comes to mind would be "Amazed" by Lonestar. The classic ballad build up.
Actually I have posted several songs. Maybe you are having a problem with you computer. I am using logic pro on a mac

Ray Kemp said:
Raw Sugar said:
I am not sure as to which song you are referring, but I am new to the technological end of recording. I have played an accoustic piano all of my life until a few months ago. I am trying to learn how to use the volume controls etc. Please bare with me. I love that song by the way.

What shall I call you Raw or Sugar?
You've only posted one song here so that's what I'm reviewing.
It would be helpful knowing what your setup is. Which DAW ? What keyboard?
Hey! don't think I'm trying to give anything other than encouraging comments here. It's great to hear someone trying to create commercial music instead of pretentious parodies of bygone centuries (except the 20th) :-)

Ray
Hello Raw, the piece starts with most beautiful and exciting piano textures. Later development of the themes is interesting, too. Let me provide, however, some critique. The rhythmic percussion, started from about 1 min, in my opinion, spoils the initial image. It makes a feeling of triviality after the deep and thoughtful start (maybe it is only my personal impression though). This rhythm even prevented me from tracking the piece to its end...
I like how when the accompaniment comes in the first time I expected it to typical progression of Pachelbel's Canon in D but instead it was a very interesting progression used really nicely. The drum in this piece really adds to the theme of this piece, this piece has got alot of potential like Adrian said. Keep working at it!

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