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This is a short work for brass ensemble.
I am still very much a neophyte when it comes to digital rendering, so the sound is not near the level of many on this forum. What you hear here came straight from the notation program using GPO4. (I'm working to expand my libraries and my digital chops!)
Any comments on the composition (good,bad and ugly!) are welcome and appreciated in advance.
A score is also attached.
I'll refer to the timeline.
0:00 - 0:04
The opening is quite impressive, catchy and heralds a piece full of possibility.
There is quite a bit going on just in these four seconds, with rhythm, color and melody.
The ascent from notes on the tuba to the trumpet motif is deftly done.
The textures and harmonies are pleasing and original.
From 0:05 to 0:12, the texture thins out a great deal. I would like to see more harmonies, more complex melodies, even at this early point, rather than the particular chord structure you have.
The quickening of tempo at 0:32 - 0:37 and the contrasts of timbre work very well. That increased velocity with the trumpet melody is excellent. I would like to see more alteration of tempo like that in the piece. It is invigorating.
As far as revision might go: I am thinking less punctuation of the passages, and more forward movement and interplay between various lines.
I have some intuition that tells me: everything needed for the piece, in the way of substance to expand is in the first few seconds. A full analysis would be needed for me to unpack that. Afterwards, inversions, retrogrades, transpositions, minor random variations, and other devices could complexify those moments where the texture might be too thin, or where the melodic content might be too sparse.
That is my initial impression. I hope it is constructive and helpful in some way.
I enjoyed this piece thoroughly.
The harmonies are great, but maybe look at some more contrast in the different sections. Particularly in the dynamics.
For instance in bars 31-35, it seems like a great potential to have a huge crescendo or something of that sort.
Otherwise, very enjoyable.
Love it. Have you thought about adding percussion? It seems necessary to my ears if i was forced to be critical.
Pretty good! It seems too short to me, or if not too short, the end needs to be "bigger" for lack of a better word. Also, in a couple spots, the thought passed my mind that the passing around of the main motif seemed a little heavy handed, perhaps predictable. Overall, I like the rhythmic activity and harmonic/melodic patterns though, effective writing for the instruments. And to re-emphasize, the ending seemed a bit abrupt and in no way "inevitable" or decisive, for whatever reason.
Thank you all for your comments. They are very welcome.
Yes the goal is to have it performed, but I would like to work on having a better representation of the piece for people to hear.
I see what you mean about texture thinning. My thinking was to try to create a sonic variety with a single family of instruments. I'm going to revisit this and see if I can't "fatten" it up a bit.
After seeing your comment, I realized that it does seem to have only two dynamics; loud and louder. Definitly something to be looked at.
I hadn't thought of percussion, but I am now.
Your right, the ending is not there. The piece started as a personal excercise to explore some new(for me!) harmonic structure. Endings have always been hard for me and I guess after all the time working on it, I fell into V-I.
It does need something "bigger".
Would it be poor forum etiquette to repost the piece here after some reworking?
Again, thanks to all of you.
Definitely not. Please repost your rewrites.
I'm really excited to hear the bigger ending because I thought the current ending was positively polite. But really, I'm probably hearing it as a movement to a potential multi-movement piece.