Clocks

[JeffreyPeterson]

I've never done this before, but I would love to hear what you guys think.   Give me the bad more than the good plz....other wise I'll never progress! ;)

 

 

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(first song)

[Vlad Burlea]

Hi, Jeffrey. What can I say? Good work, you have all sections of composition: interesting  beginning, good stop at 1"08, middle with good development and the end. All its fine. Only I think the cello sampl is not very good in the upper register and if You can record live cello can be greate, but cello melody line is exactly for cello! Congratulations!

[Vlad Burlea]

By the way, percution are not interesting, George is right.If You use simphonicall staff try to leave that tipe of percution and find something else.

[JeffreyPeterson]

Thanks guys for your thoughts....yes I agree the drums are no good at :48 and 2:30 to busy I would say.

Yes George I'm trying to go for a film scores type sound. 

I'm surprised that both of you said the Cello was fake sounding.  I though it sounded real, how can I improve that?

[Bob Morabito]

Hi Jeffrey--

Rally nice piece--it hangs together very well. and simply works:)

My only comments would be the percussion in spots needing work, and also maybe taking a second look at the chromatic ending notes of the two phrases about halfway thru, and then again about 3/4 of the way thru.

All in all a really EXCELLENT work...thanks so much for sharing.

Bob Morabito


PS I'd honestly be remiss if I didn't mention I  read another review of your piece here which I really had problems with. I do this because I dont think most of the comments are applicable, or should be taken to heart.

Perhaps its just me, but first off, I dont think any context is needed on how to comment on your work..it simply works, as a piece of music.
Further comments about ideas being too brief, and needing to chill out, etc etc. I feel are totally not applicable here, either.

Ive listened to your work several times now, and still cant see or hear what the other reviewer heard, though Ive really tried..

And Im really lost as to them saying it  sounds like a host of different film scores melded into one quick piece, etc..To me, it hangs together really well.
I also dont see many unnecessary trimmings, and the good stuff is ALREADY shining..

Although there may be some sage general composition advice in whats written, I cant for the life of me see it as applying to your piece.

And I dont have much of a problem with your opening cello either:)

Again, really nice job!

[Adrian Allan]

This is a nice sounding film score. I liked the guitar samples in particular. The cello could be improved if you're planning to submit this music - to make it less mechanical and more realsitic.

 

As a piece of film music it works perfectly well. If we were to listen to the music purely for its own terms, then what's missing is development and transition and key change. But since film music often just requires a "mood" to be evoked or underscored, then it's fine to use the same four chords and add variations to the music, rather than employ classical techniques the ones mentioned above.