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Urban Conundrum
I'd love to hear what you think

https://soundcloud.com/m_masoomi/urban-conundrum
songs that have affected me to compose this piece are:
Bladerunner and Opera Sauvage albums by Vangelis
Alan Parsons Project Ammonia Avenue Pipeline
Hans Zimmer's Rango Suit

Beware that the attached MP3 file is the older version

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Hi 8Rivers,

Soft pop, well produced -

Gavin

Well done 8Rivers, this is pleasant and attractive.  The repetition is effective and you include additional parts often enough that our ears aren't bored by it.  You could have blended the two sections more smoothly, or even begin the piece with the simpler, slower part and then build up before a fade out but these are just options, what you have works fine.

Thanks man, I changed some things in the beginning and the transition as you mentioned. if you wanna compare, compare the mp3 file attached to the new SoundCloud one, Thanks again,

Ingo Lee said:

Well done 8Rivers, this is pleasant and attractive.  The repetition is effective and you include additional parts often enough that our ears aren't bored by it.  You could have blended the two sections more smoothly, or even begin the piece with the simpler, slower part and then build up before a fade out but these are just options, what you have works fine.

Thanks mate, oh is it soft pop?
I always have trouble pinpointing the genre of my music. I wrote the genre as electronic because of the synth and wrote art rock because of the guitars. Generally I don't think pinpointing the genre matters much long as it pleases the ears of the listener, but saying the genre might have been presumptuous of me.

Gav Brown said:

Hi 8Rivers,

Soft pop, well produced -

Gavin

Very nice.  I always like this kind of music that is meant purely to set a mood.  That is what music is all about for me.  You did it well.  I listened a couple of times.  

Thanks mate, Yeah I love Vangelis's Reve song so much for exactly the same reason and sometimes listen to it before I sleep since it helps me forget my day and just relax. Music's like a story, sometimes we want dark stories and sometimes we want light stories...As Hans Zimmer said once, "...when we've built the highest high-rises and built the fastest machines, there's still gonna be room for somebody to tell you a story or for somebody to write you a piece of music..."

Douglas Locke said:

Very nice.  I always like this kind of music that is meant purely to set a mood.  That is what music is all about for me.  You did it well.  I listened a couple of times.  

Fits the chosen genre well so far as electronic goes in having a firmly mechanical arpeggio going on in the background. I don't hear the rock end of it so much. When I think of rock I think of distorted guitars waling away over drums and bass. Maybe pop/electronic would fit it better?

Very well mixed and put together. Would make a nice backdrop to a Bladerunner sort of thing IMHO. Nothing incredibly riveting jumped out at me...as Gav said. Soft pop well produced. 

Very nice. A quiet mood that insidiously gets you, I mean me, that I'd shuffle around to late at night suitably 'altered' with someone I seem about to dissolve into! I really wish the section up to 1'31" went on a lot longer. As you tagged it "soundtrack" in soundcloud you probably have a vision of what it would accompany. Won't hide the fact that I preferred that first section.

Excellent production. Professional scoring for this genre. Great that it neither needed nor had a pounding bass.

Bests, Dane

you're right I don't think it's rock at all, yeah I was thinking of the scene in the suit when they get romantic but they're both confused. Glad you liked it man.

Timothy Smith said:

Fits the chosen genre well so far as electronic goes in having a firmly mechanical arpeggio going on in the background. I don't hear the rock end of it so much. When I think of rock I think of distorted guitars waling away over drums and bass. Maybe pop/electronic would fit it better?

Very well mixed and put together. Would make a nice backdrop to a Bladerunner sort of thing IMHO. Nothing incredibly riveting jumped out at me...as Gav said. Soft pop well produced. 

Thanks for listening Dane, Yeah I'd like to make the piece longer as well but I find it's generally much harder to make my music shorter afterwards than make it longer :) . Glad that my music gets you. The notion behind this music is what Charlie Chaplin was trying to say by making Modern Times Movie , that we have forgotten the simple things in life because of the great machine we've become a part of, that is the urban life.

Dane Aubrun said:

Very nice. A quiet mood that insidiously gets you, I mean me, that I'd shuffle around to late at night suitably 'altered' with someone I seem about to dissolve into! I really wish the section up to 1'31" went on a lot longer. As you tagged it "soundtrack" in soundcloud you probably have a vision of what it would accompany. Won't hide the fact that I preferred that first section.

Excellent production. Professional scoring for this genre. Great that it neither needed nor had a pounding bass.

Bests, Dane

Hi 8Rivers,

Very nice! well mixed, beautiful sounds that blend smoothly. It’s transparent and deserves a second and third listen.

Few things,
If you wrote it with movie scenes in mind it’s really good because it lets the movie tell the story and the music is strengthening the scenes. Very professionally done!

As a stand alone piece (without movie scenes in mind) It starts very strong, great intro, it makes me curious about the story that you’re going to tell me. But until 1:32 it remains an intro and the story doesn’t seem t develop much.
At around 1:32 you seem to have exhausted your initial thoughts and you start a new thought. I really like the sound, it stays transparent and clear.
At around 2:50 it almost seems(!) to slide from a binary into a tertiary measure type. Is this a deliberate choice or is it my poor perception?

All in all, a lovely, smooth, well balanced piece….well done! Thanks for posting!

yes it is for a picture.. well it's always true in case of my songs... the first part till 1:30 is kind of a prelude as you pointed out and is about the timid doubtfulness before giving in ... and the second part is the intimate scene where you quietly stare at each other's eyes searching for you own soul in the eyes of your partner but at the same time you're aware that this is a forbidden and odd kind of love. the first part is in 4/4 and second part starting min 1:30 till end is in 6/8 measure. which kind of suits the purpose since I usually go for 3/4 and 6/8 measure for romantic dances both physical and in this case mental.

Thanks a lot for your kind words. the transition is unfixable since they're two different scenes, or maybe I'm lacking in skill I don't know :)



Joost Visser said:

Hi 8Rivers,

Very nice! well mixed, beautiful sounds that blend smoothly. It’s transparent and deserves a second and third listen.

Few things,
If you wrote it with movie scenes in mind it’s really good because it lets the movie tell the story and the music is strengthening the scenes. Very professionally done!

As a stand alone piece (without movie scenes in mind) It starts very strong, great intro, it makes me curious about the story that you’re going to tell me. But until 1:32 it remains an intro and the story doesn’t seem t develop much.
At around 1:32 you seem to have exhausted your initial thoughts and you start a new thought. I really like the sound, it stays transparent and clear.
At around 2:50 it almost seems(!) to slide from a binary into a tertiary measure type. Is this a deliberate choice or is it my poor perception?

All in all, a lovely, smooth, well balanced piece….well done! Thanks for posting!

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